It was a dark and foggy night, Eddy went in to the woods. He went to look for his ball and in the distance he saw slender man. At first he thought it was just a man and he rubbed his eyes and he looked again and slender man was gone. He thought that he would get him.When he was all almost home a demon popped up and disappeared then he saw a house and Eddy went into it. When he got in, the demon was in front and slender man was behind him and Eddy was suddenly trapped…
Hello Eddy, I love the way you have chosen two very different threats to your main character, one a demon and one a 'slender' man. Bringing them together at the end of the piece works well as the reader is left wondering what will happen. Small details, such as the rubbing of the eyes by your character are very good, as that is what we all would do if we were unsure about what we were seeing in those circumstances. Well done and keep writing :)
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